REL 3145: Discussion of Papers
Think about the intended audience of your paper, and
always think about the question. Consider the following conclusion:
Even though
possession isn't something that we can prove, or demonstrate for sure,
there is scientific reasoning stipulating that the cause of this
condition is multifactorial, in which spiritual, social, psychological
and physical factors may all play a role...However, as yet, there are
no biological theories concerning the origins of these disorders.
Therefore, besides screening for common medical and psychiatric
conditions, the clinician should also examine the particular cultural
context in which the patient presents.
The question
was whether it is true that women are more likely to be possessed than
men, and if so, why. This paragraph - remember, it is the concluding
paragraph of the paper - does not address that at all. Instead, we are
given advice that is obviously aimed at clinicians. I wasn't asking how
to treat people with possession. Don't just pad out a paper with random
information that you read somewhere - and incidentally, this should
have been attributed to a source. It also seems odd to say that
physical factors might be a cause, and yet dismiss the role of biology.
Here's from a paper that is better researched:
The
overwhelming presence of women in possession activities can also be
explained through a more scientific lens. Anthropologists Alice B.
Kehoe and Dody H. Giletti argue that this preponderance is linked to
deficiencies in thiamine, tryptohan-niacin, calcium and vitamin D
commong among women in traditional societies where poverty of sumptuary
ruls may limit their nutrient intakes (549). Keho and Giletti propose
that there is a strong correlation between societies that subsist on
diets lacking the aforementioned nutrients and spirit possession, while
populations that report adequate intakes of these same nutrients tend
to lack 'culturally sanctioned spirit possession' (550).
This is
excellent research: we didn't cover Kehoe's and Giletti's theory in
class, but it offers a biological explanation for the higher
probability of women being possessed - if you search, there's a lot
that you can find, and you get credit for going beyond what we've
discussed in class. Notice that this demonstrates that the diagnostic
manual used by the previous student was out of date.
Here is some weak research:
The events
that happened in prehistory were not written, all the events were oral
and still we believe them to be real. So why would not the Nican
Mopohua be true?
The trouble is that the student poses this question but leaves
it unanswered - even though there are some obvious responses that could
be made. A prehistoric society is one for which no written sources
survive. For such socieites, oral testimony may well be the main source
we have (along with artefacts). But, as I explained in class, New
Spain (as Mexico was then known) is not prehistoric. We have many
written sources - for example, Zumarraga's will and the reports of
Bustamante's sermon. The sermon of Bustamante, in particular, is
written evidence for the falsity of the Nican Mopohua, and it alone
constitutes a sufficient response to the question. In any case, even
when dealing with a prehistoric society, we do not just assume that
oral testimony is true.
This is a common problem. If you are engaged in an argument with
someone who is present, then it is a fair tactic to ask a question and
wait for a response. If someone cannot offer a good answer to your
question, then you win the argument. But when you are writing a paper,
you have a duty to offer an answer on your opponent's behalf. If you
cannot do so, that does not necessarily indicate that this was a
telling question. It might just advertise, as in this case, that you
have not researched the topic very thoroughly.
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